Sprytts ~Blue-Senoire~


July 31st, 2010, 3:41 am



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I got a head-ache from reading this...

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That was a doggone eyesore! I had to put eye drops in! yikes!

I have to hand it to you sir, as a reviewer, your giving it to them straight is not only what they asked for, but also what some authors might need to encourage them to rethink their process and refine their skills.

posted by mandu on July 31st, 2010, 7:48 pm



 

I didn't mean to seem...impatiant...about the review. I could have asked someone else if you didn't want to review it. But alas, you have suffered so much to get this together, so thank you for the review.

What to take from this...
Yes. While I disagree that lots of colors is a bad thing, the combination of colors is pretty hard on the eyes.

I didn't see a character section...the consistancy just seemed to...turn into that. That's a shame that they came out the way they did, because characters are always my main focus...

Yes. Too many fourth wall jokes. Too many spoilers. Too many references. But I don't consider the recent chapters filler.

I don't wanna get too into detail here, so here's the deal.
Since Sprytts is mostly filler, I had this idea where, after the conflict they're dealing with ends, I release another, new-come-er friendly second season as seperate comic, in which I fix all the problems. (I'd call it "Sprytts XG" or something. Something to tell you it's not noobish anymore)
Remaking Sprytts would be far too stressful, because the one I have is already a remake. (Beleive it or not, the other one was a lot worse)
EDIT: Of course, I'm not throwing out the idea of redoing it, I'm just saying what was going on in my head.

I feel like this was bais. I mean, I AM a very paraniod person but...you kinda admitted that you read through it thinking it would be bad and you didn't want to review it...I dunno.

But thank you for reviewing it. I'm handling this much better than I thought I would.

posted by Ultima527 on July 31st, 2010, 9:08 pm



  @Ultima527

Ultima, I shall meet you on a level plane since you might need something to think about.

The old saying, "never judge a book by its cover" is a creed all reviewers go through and live by...but in the case of sprite or "custom" sprite comics, what you see is pretty much what you usually get.

I read your comic as well expecting nothing grand nor bad, but what I saw was 500+ pages of eye distorting "colorful" comics that by the time any reader that had dared read it had finished, the virtual boy from Nintendo would be heaven to them. Lots of colors IS a bad thing. It shows that you are replacing story and covering it up with too much special effects meaning for all the flash and pretty lights, there is nothing supporting your comic.

It would also help your case if you made interesting characters. Already presentation suffered, but the lack of character building, tension, or development shows that all the focus on was "pretty" looks of what the characters are to be. At least you acknowledge there is too many jokes and stuff, but honestly mate, these jokes are very forced...it makes me feel like you and a small group of people are the only one laughing... And sadly mate, from what I read, yes the recent chapters are filler...

Final note: Don't Bother with Sprytts. It is not worth salvaging let alone making a spin off season.

The best thing to do is practice the art of story telling and then practice on making better comic presentation.

There are a lot of helpful people on smackjeeves with advice that can make you better. The only thing you need to do to get it is look. ^(^.^ )

Now better get back to finishing my review and Zabo's Comic before Zabo and Chabo blow a fuse. ^( >.<)

posted by Zanoh on July 31st, 2010, 10:57 pm



 

@Zanoh
So...don't judge a book by it's cover unless it's a costum spritter comic?
That's a pretty crappy rule.

Look, I'm not mad that I got a bad review, I just wanna know what I did to make Blue Senore so P.O.d.

I suppose the lights were too distracting, but don't tell me theres no plot substance.

I think the problem with Sprytts is that I planned for it too be way too long. The characters aren't interesting because they're still under the beginning stages of their development. And filler, by definition, is an episode or arc that has nothing to do with the main plot. The fights in the recent chapters are filler, but there's still an overall plot.

I'm not gonna defend my comic anymore. I'd have more to say in it's defense, but after what happened with Malakite, everything that comes out of my mouth is just gonna be disreguarded as flaming.

Thanks again for reviewing my comic, but next time your gonna use a review to get back at someone, tell them.
Sorry I bothered you reviewers with...a review request. It won't happen again.

posted by Ultima527 on August 1st, 2010, 7:04 pm



  @Ultima527

Again...you fail to see what I am pointing out and you take it as an attack. Stop trying to defend your work and take a different POV.

The general rule is "Don't Judge a Book By Its Cover". There is no "unless" about it. I am stating however that high chances in heaven that sprite comics and comics similar to those like yours (that fall under the "custom" sprites category) usually tend to fall under the lines of the ad banner or cover...which is sad in both an artist's personal resume and working operandi.

And mate, I can tell you are mad at the review you had received. Why else are you defending your work? Because you feel your pride as an author was literally torn by your work being critiqued. I will tell you that pride can easily be broken, but one's skills can always improve.

You are showing me you are unwilling to improve. First you said, a lot of colors isn't a bad thing, then you finally say it is a bit too distracting. That showed promise until you said, "but don't tell me there is no plot substance". Mate, there could be plot substance, but the way you delivered it was sloppy...and full of filler. There is no character tension, no development, no rising action, no conclusion. If it has none of that, then there is absolutely zero plot substance.

There are more problems with Sprytts than you can shake a finger at. Presentation, Plot, Characters, and before you prattle on with definitions, I know full damn well of what filler is. I just read 500 pages and that in itself is a pretty big arc, and unless there was a huge storyline in that arc that I could see (and sadly I couldn't), then that is filler...

Also, forget what Malakite said, I am judging your actions right here and now and already you are disregarding advice from not one but TWO reviewers who isn't Malakite. And ALREADY you took my advice and showed unwillingness to change. The fault lies within you now...

Your welcome for us to be privileged to review it, but there is no next time because what came after that was garbage. No one here is out to get you or "get back at you". We are here to review YOUR work and ABILITY. NOT YOU AS A PERSON.

If you can not accept criticism, that is your problem.

Cheers.

posted by Zanoh on August 1st, 2010, 7:24 pm



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