December 10th, 2009, 8:09 pm

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nice review! (:

posted by Plazmaz on December 11th, 2009, 8:09 am


Nicely done.

posted by Yamataro on December 11th, 2009, 8:16 am


Looks good. Also, mind if I join this comic? I read plenty of comic to know which are good ones to really bad ones here on Smackjeeves. That and I probably plan on being a critic and could use some practice.

posted by godmoderncommander on December 11th, 2009, 11:28 am


I knew you would say that about the writing, and the art. Let me explain myself, as the artist. Right now, I'm in the process of redrawing the first 20 pages, and the only redoes you've seen are pages 1,2 and 18.I am aware of the flaws, and am eliminating them.
As for the writer, he admitted he wasn't thinking about anything and wrote the first 20 pages in 5 minutes, at 3:00 in the morning, on caffeine. Now, I'm not making any excuses here, it's just that I'm trying to get him going in the right direction with the story and have him rewrite pages 5-7 at the very least. He disagrees, as he argues that the writing later on will get better and overshadow everything.
Anyways, since this is incomplete, I'm asking that once we polish the first 20 pages, can you re-review this? I'll let you know when were finished with cleaning this mess.

posted by redandblack64 on December 11th, 2009, 11:38 am


Can you please review my comic?


Great review, by the way. :)

posted by Casper on December 11th, 2009, 2:35 pm

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